Be sure that you've followed up each of those instances with a few persuasive statements arguing that those facts and examples support your main argument or prove your point correct.With our death penalty example, you could state, perhaps, that those who support the death penalty cite the deterrent effects of capital punishment as a reason that it should be kept in place.
As you may know, your thesis statement is the sentence (or two) that communicates the main point of your essay.
It usually appears in the first paragraph, and it's often the last sentence in the first paragraph. If you're in a time crunch, you may be able to do this by re-examining the essay question and thinking about the major points that you've made throughout the body paragraphs of your essay.
While it can be painful to cut out a paragraph or more that you've worked hard on, if that paragraph really sticks out to you as being off-topic, you're better off cutting it out.
Next, consider whether you've left out any major points.
For example, if you've written a persuasive essay arguing that the death penalty should be abolished, you could go back and revise your thesis statement from this: The death penalty should be outlawed in the United States.
To this: The death penalty should be outlawed in the United States because it does not deter violent crimes, it is applied in a discriminatory fashion, and not all individuals sentenced to death in this country are guilty.
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If you ever discover that type of problem when you go back to edit your essay, it can be easy to fix.
Identify each instance in which you've provided a fact or example in support of your position.